Team Negi Discussion

Hmmm, that's true.

I'll change it like this.
They force me to make a choice, and I pick Syrup, because he was the first to come to my aid.

Makes a bit more sense.

Sorry if that was rude at all just little things like that annoy me >_>

Don't worry, I'm definitiyl asking for criticizm.
I wanna make this as good as possible.

Ok then.
Make the next part, your keeping me in suspense!

Part 4/10 (Since it seems we're doing 2 DO each)

Starts with Negi and Syrup on Prima Vista, in hopes of getting to Snow faster.
Dude's team agreed to give us a hand, because we're looking to actually find and help more allys.
Shinigami engages in a dialogue with me me about trust.
How I'm so willing to trust everyone around me before given reasons of doubt.
I tell him a little about my past, and why I'm the way I am.
He feels sorry for me and my cold nature.
Our trip is cut short however, when numberoneSTUNNA and Ballandchain arrive.
numberoneSTUNNA found the ship and seeing all of us together made us easy prey if he were to take down the whole ship. All of us would die from a crash and he wants that.
Ballandchain joined his little attack because he wants to take me out once and for all so he can finally take down Windurst when he returns to our world.
I ready my magic, and this time Dude joins my side to fight.

Fight #4: Me with an assist of Dude VS. Ballandchain with an assist of numberoneSTUNNA

We win and the two of them vanish for now, but not before the ship catches flame.
We are confused because the two never left our sight.
With no other choice, we make plans to jump ship, but there are troubles.
Dude's team knows that I have magic and can break my fall, and they want to keep me safe so I can find and help the other warriors.
I say that I'm not leaving until I can help them. But its no use, Dude's team pushes me overboard.
It's while conjuring enough magic for "Float" to break my fall that I remember, Syrup never left the ship.
I wonder how they're doing before things go black.

....I can easily use both of those things to my advantage.

Stunna Appearing can easily be when Dude realizes who he is.
And the Prima Vista Burning could just be one big fat mindscrew (if you don't know why then read the backstory in the backstory topic)

Part 5/10

I awake weary on the Lunar Subterrane. It seems my Float spell weakened the impact, but didn't protect me entirely.
I look around for any signs of the ship and Dude's team. They're nowhere to be found. But I do notice Syrup.
He approaches me, and I ask what happened.
He tells me it was my fault the ship crashed. In my fighting I hit the ship many times with my magic, and it caught fire.
He explained that the ship crashed far from here, and that everyone on it was fataly injured.
He asks how could I. He asks how I could just run away like a coward. He asks how I could just leave my friends to die like that.
I grab my head, this sudden feeling of guilt building inside me. My head hurts, the sudden flood of hate filled emotions raging in me.
He asks how I'll ever be able to do Ballandchain in if I can't keep from destroying everything around me.
Syrup approaches me, in attempt to use this moment of weakness as a chance to kill me.
Before he could get too close, Brawl and Syaoran jump in the way, swords ready. They tell him to stay away from an ally and prepare for battle.
But I still consider Syrup my ally, so in my confusion I shout for Brawl and Syaoran to step away.
They try to keep control of the situation, but realize in this moment I cannot be reasoned with.

Fight #5: Me with an assist of Syrup VS Brawl with an assist of Syaoran

We finish the fight and I am still in my fury and ready to finish them off. But Brawl starts talking.
He was skeptical when Hero had mentioned Negi turning bad, but it seems he was right.
The two leave. Syrup chuckles them off, and in a confusion I wander off.

Fact: Syrup needs to die.

and if that scene from before takes place in my story I would just swap the battles around. (I'm fighting Stunna with ballandchain assist and I have Negi as assist)

Alright, don't worry, his death will be soon.

Part 6/10

My wanderings led me to Orphan's Cradle, where I decide to take a rest.
It is now that Sanaki finds me. He questions my actions up until now. He asks why I've been fighting heroes.
I tell him I can't tell who from who anymore. I have no sense between good and evil anymore. I just follow orders.
My orders this time was to protect. Protecting a villian is the same as protecting a hero. Either ways, I protect something.
He says he senses much good in me, but have been misguided my myself and my own life.
He knows I haven't lost all sense of self, because I want to fight. I was given the chance in this war to do whatever I please, but of my own free will chose to fight Ballandchain.
He knows I just want to keep people safe. He decides to test my strength for himself.

Fight #6: Me VS Sanaki

After a long fight, he ends it willingly.
He says I have outstanding control over my magic, and that in my heart it comes from the will to do good.
I continue to ask, if that is so, then why do I act the way I do.
He says I must figure out for myself. He knows I've been looking for Snow, and that he knows where she is.
He points me in her direction and warns me that she's been injured. I thank him, and rush to find her.

Good job Sanaki
"She's been injured but I'm not gonna do a damn thing!"
XD

nah just messing with you.

*gasp* Negi is getting on, I need to write some story tonight =O

I should most likely start writing my story and have team mates comment on it.
But not tonight.

Sanaki knows I won't be able to finally break free from myself without doing this on my own.

Part 7/10

Snow and her team are at Crystal World (IX), cornered by Zell and Heimdalgc.
Snow has been injured and stepped out of the fight for the moment.
Aqua and Jeryl are doing they're best to hold them off until I show up. Snow shouts my name as I arrive.
In control of my fury for the moment, I step to the front line of the battle to face both of them.
I shout for everyone to get back, ready to sacrifice myself and make up for hurting everyone.
Aqua steps forward first, telling me she won't let a friend of Snow die.

Fight #7: Me with an assist of Aqua VS Zell with an assist of Heimdalgc

We chase them off, finally winning. I turn to Snow and use magic to heal her wounds as best I can, and she is able to stand.
Syrup is finally able to catch up to me, but after everything that has happened, I am skeptical of him and ask him to leave.
Snow confronts him and tells him to back off, being the first one to get in his face and truly provoke him.
She turns to me and says she has something important to say, and to meet me at Kefka's Tower.
Her and her team leave. I choose to stay and interogate Syrup.
I ask where he keeps disappearing to, and wonder why bad things kept happening to me.
Keeping up with the BS act, he says he has no idea what I'm talking about.
I end it by storming off.

Part 8/10

At Kefka's Tower, Snow waits for me.
But, seeing her a threat to his plan to destroy the hero's minds, starting with me, he meets her there first.
Through dialogue, she gets him to admit his entire plan. Him, not realizing that I've shown up at last, and heard everything.
Finally seeing everything in the light, my emotions are completely set free.
Happiness for reuniting with Snow.
Anger for being decieved by Syrup.
Sadness for wasting so many years at the school.
I am finally ready to destroy Syrup, with all my anger, and prepare to fight.
Snow takes my side. Now it's her turn to protect me.

Fight #8: Negi with an assist of Snow VS Syrup

The fight it long, before he finally falls. He vanishes in a burst of darkness. One of the Shadow Lurkers down.
Eyes brimming with tears of many emotions, I fall. Snow stays by my side and comforts me.
Suddenly, a burst of light appears before me and takes shape. Through many fights, I was finally able to create a crystal.
Snow was very happy, and congradulates me.
It is then that Aqua and Jeryl show up. Before Snow came here, she told them to seek out Ballandchain for me.
They say he's at Empyreal Paradox. I get up and start to leave.
Snow says she won't let me go alone, and I willingly let her come to help me finish him.

Part 9/10

We make it to Empyreal Paradox, where Ballandchain is waiting.
He laughs hysterically, ready to finish this once and for all.
I'm the final obstacle in his way of destroying Windurst, and continuing his destruction of all Vana'diel.
"By the honor of the Star Syble, by the honor of Windurst, by the honor of all Vana'diel, and by my own Honor, the King of the Beastmen, Ballandchain, shall finally fall!"

Fight #9: Me with an assist of Snow VS Ballandchain

With the power of the crystal, I am able to banish Ballandchain. My homeworld is now safe at last.

Final Part

My battles have been long. I have fought and hurt people who never should have been.
I hurt my allies.
I hurt Sanaki.
I hurt my friends.
Snow reassures me it wasn't my fault. She knows that if it wasn't for my hardships, I would have never accomplished creating the crystal.
I thank her, for everything. But, our happy reunion must end for now, there's still fighting that needs to get done.
Before we leave, she stops me.
"Hold up! I have been training my whole life. My fists are a source of great power. They are my strength. You've been put through so much at that magic school. I can only imagine how tough your training must have been. But, your magic is quite powerful. I gotta test it out for myself!' She smiles.
And for the first time in years, I do too.

Final Fight: Negi VS Snow

Our friendly fight is finished with an agreed draw.
We get ready to leave, because someone is waiting for her, and she needs to kick his ass.
I ask if I can join her team, and she happilly says yes (barring her team's approval).
And we leave, to fight more Shadow Lurkers, and prepare for the final battle with Chip Noir.


And that's my story.
Questions, comments?

Give me moment to read

It is then that DEKM, the wandering warrior appears, and sees me and Syrup teaming up on Hero. He takes Hero's side in the fight against us.

That isn't something I'd do, actually. I suggest you cut me out, as you are one of the people I save

I'll switch it to Zero.
Perhaps he got astrayed from Epic Girl and Fallen like Epic Girl did during the first part.

Yep

I will save you second, I have decided. So once I've done Mrdude's part in my story, I'll bother you for your back ground info, key points about it, etc

I guess this mean I'll have to switch my story's 4th battle to Zero as well, since it doesn't make sense for me to fight DEKM if he didn't take part in that battle. Zero's Dark Kain, right? I think I can still make that one work...

I thought Snow was killed by Syrup...

meh whatever. It's still good.

I know this is old but I just noticed this.

NegiBozu203 wrote:Part 3/5
He tells me to get help from the team in charge of an airship. Dude's team. He then leaves.

I was planning in my story to have found the ship. Have a certain event happen on it. and then you show up. Not be a captain of the ship.

Just sayin.

Dude, I'm not really saying you have to be captain but that you found this ship and with it I can ask for help.
And by law of "Finders Keepers", you're the one I have to ask, you having been the one who found it.

Ok then I just misinterpreted the post. No problem.